It’s Friday Fictioneers 100 word flash fiction time. Rochelle, our glorious host and task master, reminds us to write a beginning, middle and end and to Make-Every- Word-Count. Some days that is more difficult for me then others. Today I wrote 100 words and then hacked it in half. Inspired no doubt by my attempt the brevity of writing 6 word stories.
copyright David Stewart
“My Great-Great-Grandmother Martha was a daughter of the American Revolution.” Hannah beamed.
“My Great-Great-Grandmother Mary was a slave.” Letitia retorted.
They stood staring at the cracked Liberty Bell. The annual field trip to Philly never changed. Always the same story told and retold.
Word Count: 45
P.S. Please make sure to read the others.
Very poignant! Good job!
Neatly told and packaged. I think your story benefited from the careful carving. Sometimes 100 words is 50 too many.
So true Marie Gail. Thanks for reading.
Brilliantly concise. Nuff said.
*smooch* with sweeping hand wave gesture. My lips on the computer screen would have been weird. Besides I don’t really know how clean it is. Thanks Rochelle.
Wow you told more in 45 words than most can tell in 1000…
I got lucky. It revealed itself to me by way of a friend over coffee saying “if it were me……I’d stop right there.” Thanks Bjorn
Hum….a quick to the punch line kid of story. Good job.
Thanks. Sometimes I guess we shouldn’t muck about.
And I thought I was doing well to tell a story in 100 words. Great accomplishment done well.
I know .Each week I toil at my 100 words, choosing them just right. Then this week I was rereading my story and it seemed so much stronger if I hacked off the second half. So i did.
45 words, that’s pretty amazing. and not a word out of place.
Thanks KZ. This one fell in line.
Excellent economy of phrase! That was my challenge to myself for next week’s FF.
Thanks BA. Good luck. I think it is fun to see how succinctly and fully communication can be delivered.
Wow! Dana you really knocked this out of the par, with so few words! To do it, and do it well, in half the allotted words, is amazing!
Thanks Dawn. This one started at 100. But then it revealed itself. So I took my chisel (red pen) and cut off the entire second half. 😉
SWEET! It’s just brilliant. 😀
Oh, you’re good at that. Telling the whole story with those 45 words. Brillo pads, as my friend Jex likes to say.
I don’t know why, but this made me think of this song (totally inappro-pro for work, darling, so you may want to save it)
Give me a morsel and tell me to wait? Are you a sadist my dear? Hopefully the boss man will go to lunch so I can listen. P.S. I’m ready for 3 EST and the big launch. Feels like middle school and the space shuttle all over again. Wait no I don’t want to tie that event to your kickstarter. Your headed to the Moon!
Me, I’ve got bread and butterflies in my stomach. This is it. No turning back. AHHHHH!
Onward and upward Baby!
Hello, Dana! I want to express my gratitude for your visit to my blog. I really admire your work, especially in this post. I may just give Rochelle’s challenge a try, being that I’ve always struggled with keeping my writing brief! Thanks for the inspiration!
Do it.You’ll love it but seriously be warned it becomes highly addictive. Rochelle’s my supplier. She feeds my creative frenzy. 😉
I’ll keep feeding the addiction. Bwahahahahahaha.
I think more words would have diluted the impact, great job 🙂
Thanks Helen. I thought so to that’s why I whacked the second half off.
A big slice of history in 45 words.
A lot said in your half-a-hundred-word story.
I thought so. Somehow it felt stronger to me by hacking off the second half-a-hundred. Left it all out front. Thanks VB