Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Melancholy keys offering a melody, a sultry voice of ache, lyrics coaxing redemption fill the hollows of my soul. Its refrain circles back, returning again and again and again to where our words began.
I didn’t see it coming
Didn’t sense the approaching tempest
Whispering loss low beneath the wind
I didn’t see it coming
But you blew this house down
I became an echo resounding
the silence of your goodbye
I didn’t see it coming
The catalogue of regrets
Our imperfect history
displayed upon suddenly barren walls
I didn’t see it coming
Guilt your ghost
You left me haunted
Word Count: 100
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Gorgeous! So many lines resonate! “Guilt your ghost, you left me haunted.” Ooh. “I became an echo resounding.” Ooooh. Really wonderful use of the prompt; one of my favorites this week!
So glad it resonated. Thank you.
this was very lovely 🙂
Thank you KZ
Superb.
Thank you
Oh indeed a lament.. and the refrain work so well.. one of the things I love in poetry..
Thanks Bjorn
Oh I like that last line.
Thanks Dawn. I think I might be channeling a little of the Halloween spirit going into next week.
The repeated phrase “I didn’t see it coming” is like the downbeat in a song. Quite effective.
Yes downbeat indeed. Thanks Helena
Dear Dana,
Color me impressed. A solid offering for the poetry lovers among us.
Aloha,
Doug
Doug,
Thank you for the compliment. Every once in a while I wax poetic and it just must be expressed.
Dana
Dear Dana,
Count me in on the minor keys. 😉 “I became an echo resounding”…love that line. Touching. Poignant. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle. Yes i’d say the minor key was as resounding as my echo.
lovely piece, i liked this one.
Thank you.
Written with in a beautiful minor key. Well done.
A melancholy melody indeed.
The repetition of ‘didn’t see it coming’ is very effective. Well done.
Thank you Sandra. It’s quite the woeful refrain.
haunting bass tones in this post. Love buried beneath the keys
Excellent piece Dana
Ooo “buried beneath the keys” would be a great title. 🙂
I fear the base key might have gotten stuck on this one.
Thanks
I’ve always liked minor keys. 🙂 Nicely done!
janet
Aha a musician. Minor key indeed. I often find them the most interesting. Thanks Janet.